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The pools

The pools

On  Sunday night I went to the pools at 6pm. We drove there and when it was very busy.  My mum, brother (Samuel.) It was at Onehunga pools.

The reason I went to the pool because I and my little brother had a swimming class. I start at 6:30 to 7:30 and my brother stats from 6pm to 6:30.

I asked my mum “is it time for swimming class?”

“Five more minutes,” my mum said.  

When it was time we did breaststroke we did 2 laps after we did freestyle the teacher asked: “do you want to  go first?”

“Ok,” I replied. So I went first after we did dives on the last dive my nose started to bleed. Once it started to bleed so mum said softly “I can shower early.” I asked, “if I can go out again?”

“No,” my mum says.

“It is going to end now.”

That night I felt really hungry.  When we got home we ate food and then I watch some TV. Once it was time to sleep we went upstairs to sleep.

I Aisha have read your writing and I love you used dialogue and  I really think that you could add more detail. Next time use elaboration.

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Why cell phones should be banned?

Firstly in my opinion that cell phones should be band from holding it because
you might get crash or get seriously injured and kill people. Then human’s
crossing the road you will bump into them.

Secondly, the traffic light turns green and they won't know when to go. Also
when you are going past the red traffic lights you will crash and get hurt.

When you drive a car you can not drive with one hand. Also when a car appears
out of the streets or driveway.

Between 2003 and 2008, there were 482 injury crashes and 25 fatal crashes
attributed to the use of mobile phones.

Buddy comment by Zara - I love the way how you have used the word
‘attributed’ in your writing and, next time you should probably work on making
it makes sense but either than that, it’s amazing to keep up the good work.

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